I hate queries that drop names. It's ridiculous. If you were so great, how come you don't have an agent or manager already?
This one - in particular - bothers me greatly. Who even cares what the scripts are about after you read this self-serving first paragraph?
"I have three completed scripts I would like to submit. Although I am not currently represented all are under consideration at Warner Brothers in the office of Lionel Wigram. I have also succeeded in having major stars interested in my work. TOM CRUISE, via the office of RICK NICITA (CAA) is currently reading one of my scripts (copy of email asking for release forms below.)"
blah blah blah.